Lesson 72

And I’m Jenny Silver.

Welcome to Business English for Global Competence.

Yes. Let's learn how to communicate effectively in business.

Let's learn how to write emails in English together.

So, let's get started.

Okay! Let's take a look at Takashi's email.

Fine-tuning 微調整

I think this is good. But it would be better to say why it was great. Saying that it was good because it was say, a learning experience would show growth and improvement to help build his career and it also acknowledges all the hard work involved.

It would be better to keep this sentence on a positive or motivational note rather than a positive point but negative point. Also there are some facts here that Lucy's aware of. So he could make it more about his observations.

Okay! Let's take a look at the Rewritten Email.

Now, let's take a look at Lucy's Reply.

Jennyさんの教え

I'm sure I said this a lot before. But it's all about keeping your email short and sweet with a little bit of a personal touch. Make everything clear for the recipient and use lists if necessary.

The person may be very busy. So you want to make it as easy as possible for them by being clear, concise and friendly. We covered a lot of phrases and patterns that are common in emails. So I really hope you'll customize them to your situation and give them a try.

ラジオビジネス英語2021/08/18 

This is turning out to be a long story. So he should just keep it short and sweet.

No need to paint a full picture. Otherwise it'll get confusing.

ラジオビジネス英語2021/04/14

When writing emails, it's good to keep them short and sweet by focusing on the question you have.

ラジオビジネス英語2021/03/31

I would say it a little differently. Americans love short and sweet emails. So, because there's a bit of a redundancy in this sentence. You can just say, "It's been a long time. How have you been?"

When writing emails, it's good to keep them short and sweet. Make sure you stick to your points and add just a little bit of a personal touch.

See you next time. Bye!